The Portrait of the Killer
Cold, blue calculating eyes had he,
Expressionless face, not easy to read,
Contract Killer, fast as lightning was he,
A dark, stalking ghoul stealing life from thee,
A killer, with cropped, smooth, spiky black hair,
His victims, he will stealthily ensnare,
Well toned arms, strong muscles bulging out,
No matter what happened, he’d never freakout,
A fine black blazer with a crisp white shirt,
Stylish silk ties, his talk, always curt,
A man not to be messed with, dealt with,
It feels he has come straight out of a myth,
He grabs his gun, and takes his position,
Sniping his target with perfect precision,
His parents died in a terrorist attack,
Now he tells a story, that takes us aback.
The Killer’s Story
Rykov was, by profession, a hitman,
Hired to kill Dan, a certain businessman,
Dan was a scammer, cruel and corrupt,
If his scams failed, his anger would erupt,
He took money, saying he would invest it,
Through his fake mutual fund groups, not legit,
He scammed the rich, made them live on the roadside,
Bankrupted the poor, made many suicide,
Dan had filthy, oily and thin black hair,
His teeth stained, long awaiting repair,
Rykov stalked Dan, memorized his circuit,
He once saw Dan pick a stranger’s pocket,
Rykov sniped Dan in the heart, killed instantly,
He called his client, demanded his bounty,
Now tell me, really, truthfully, honestly,
He was right, killing this sinner, wasn’t he?
A r n a v - W r i t e s 
A very sinister poem Arnav! Darkness stalks you as you read, drawing you into both characters you introduce. You pose a very interesting question at the end, which is morally very difficult to answer – as when is it ever right to take another’s life? A deep discussion for another time! I like the way that you have made one of the ‘bad’ characters out to look good and who has a burning fire within for revenge and the other ‘bad’ character out to be a weaselly kind of person – perhaps one you can find a shred of sympathy for and the other, perhaps not. Very interesting indeed.
Suggestions for you to think about would be always making sure you use the correct word – like in the following sentence: “Bankrupted the poor, made many suicide,” I think, perhaps, that the word needed was ‘suicidal’. Also, when you have made the ‘villain’ out to be a big-time criminal, having him pick pockets (a small-time criminal activity) seems a little incongruous: “He once saw Dan pick a stranger’s pocket,”
Apart from that, it was a poem that was very enjoyable to read as it made you think, it drew you into another world and gave you the occasional shiver as you realised what was going to happen at the end. Well done. 🙂
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